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[YYH] [Koenma/Ayame/Botan] A Flower for Every Ferrygirl [Mar. 20th, 2006|08:02 pm]
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Title: A Flower for Every Ferrygirl
31 Days Theme: March 20th/Eyes which are Really Petals
Series: YYH
Character: Koenma/Ayame/Botan
Rating: G
Notes: This written just for the 31_days theme. Word count: 264.

The garden is quiet in Reikai. Koenma is just as silent, his thoughts, for once, outpacing his mouth. The ferrygirl walking beside him doesn't seem to notice; she is enraptured. This is her first time making it to the center of the maze. She is breathless from all the twists and turns, and now she stands in awe of the multitude of flowers that grow and tangle like a quilt gone awry.

"There is one for every ferry girl that was and that is." Koenma explains when she doesn't ask. She kneels before a purple bed and murmurs in delight when the irises turn towards her attentively. He gazes at them. They are a wondrous sight, a ferry girl and her flower

Koenma starts when he feels something snuffling his ankle. Looking down, he sees a lone peony, frilly and friendly. He wonders, for a moment, how this peony would react to its ferry girl. They are alike: the color of its petals and her eyes.

The peony pulls away suddenly, and stands tall and straight. Koenma realizes that Ayame is coming towards him, irises in her hands, her black eyes calm like the surface of a deep pond. He knows it is time to ask her, just as he'd planned.

The peony stretches for the sky, its stem taut and quivering. Before Koenma can puzzle out what it wants, Ayame plucks it from where it stands and holds it out to him.

Slowly, he reaches out, but he doesn't know if it's for her hand or for the flower she holds in it.

Began: Tuesday, February 28, 2006, 7:59 PM
Finished: Tuesday, February 28, 2006, 9:17 PM

For those not familiar, Botan means "peony" while Ayame means "iris". Seems there's a trend for naming ferrygirls after flowers, thus the garden.


[User Picture]From: luckychan
2006-03-21 12:59 pm (UTC)
Slowly, he reaches out, but he doesn't know if it's for her hand or for the flower she holds in it.

Oh, that was lovely. And really sad, too, in a way--which is probably why it's lovely.

I've always loved the whole Botan/Koenma/Ayame triangle (although of course I would love a happy ending for Koenma and Botan XD), and I really love how you portrayed that here. Subtle, since you you didn't really say anything outright. Really nice. ^_^
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[User Picture]From: nananaginip
2006-03-22 05:13 am (UTC)
My fave line too. <3 Thanks, thanks, thanks! I didn't mean for it to be sad, it just seems that I write sad things better, LOL.

Yeah, the triangle IS interesting to write about, isn't it? I think the reason why it sticks in my head so much is because of that info that I read from the manga, where it said that Botan set Koenma and Ayame up, so it's like ever since then, I gotta reconcile the Ayame thing before the Koenma/Botan thing.

Thank you for commenting. *glomps Misty*
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[User Picture]From: tsuki_tenshi
2006-10-13 06:04 am (UTC)
I've recently become a Botan/Koenma fan, but I'm curious about the Koenma/Ayame pairing too...all I can ever find only says they show interest in each other in the manga. I'd like to know more...oh well.

Drabbles really are something. I find when I try to write anything short it's either too cryptic or too long. Sometimes both^^;;

I also agree...that ending is awesome. It just...has a certain feel to it, that leaves the drabble in a good why. It's conclusive without really definitely concluding anything. I love it.

I recently stumbled upon your story 'Riven'. What are the odds of seeing that updated? The snippets I've read are very intriguing...I'd love to know the whole story. Not trying to be a nuiscence, though...Heaven knows, ninety percent of the stories in MY head never even see light of day. But anyway, I really like the way you write, and the way you get inside Koenma's head, to the point where you don't even bother to think about what form he's in...Toddler or teenager, he's the same Prince of Reikai, ne?

...I'm rambling now. I love what I've read. I really hope you pick up Riven again sometime :)
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[User Picture]From: nananaginip
2006-10-22 05:48 am (UTC)
Hmm, that's strange. I know Reikai Files used to have a short summary of that part of the manga, courtesy of Aka. I can't seem to find it anymore, but I do have a copy if you'd like me to email it. Thanks very much for the comment/s (ff.net too, right?) Very unexpected, but pleasant.

Ohhh, I have that same tendency with writing too. Well, the long part. For some reason, things just groooow. Practice makes you better, though. If all else fails, just pretend you're writing a summary of the story and cut off the intro and the ending. That's what I like about the whole concept - jump into the scene and then jump out before you get bored. ^^ My attention span, it is short...

Speaking of which, that's one of the reasons why I haven't written Riven all these years. For some reason, if I try to do something past a one shot, I lose steam and sort of... stop. So chances of Riven being written in full are, well, kind of slim. I write random snippets, if that helps. (I know it doesn't, but yeah, XD) I really do appreciate your interest, though.

And yeah, Koenma is who he is, no matter what he appears to be. *huggles Koenma*
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