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Random Shard: Defend yourself, my lady. I will not be gentle. [Jun. 20th, 2006|01:58 am]
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Defend yourself, my lady. I will not be gentle.


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I wonder if it would work better with a semicolon. I know I could use a comma if I said "for I will not be gentle" but I wasn't going for that sound.

Rambling over a single line. It's no wonder I hardly complete anything. ^^

By the by, many thanks to swollenfoot for the birthday gift - a subscription to Writer's Market! *glomps* One step at a time, ne?
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[User Picture]From: kristiann
2006-06-20 11:07 pm (UTC)
Defend yourself, my lady; I will not be gentle.
- the speaker is speaking in a faster tone, and maybe even amused

Defend yourself, my lady - I will not be gentle.
- the speaker pauses for emphasis

Defend yourself, my lady. I will not be gentle.
- I'm thinking this is more of a quiet, serious tone
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[User Picture]From: nananaginip
2006-06-21 04:48 am (UTC)
Oh, so it CAN work with a period. I felt like it was off. Thanks for the analysis. ^.^ Yup, quiet, serious tone, that's exactly what I wanted. <3
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